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She sat in moon shadows
Hanging in a silver-laden sky
When he fell
In to her rose garden of beauty.
Nocturnal pixies drifted
On perfumed breezes;
And the thrum of gossamer wings accompanied
By the beating of hearts composed
The sweetest evensong ever
To be heard
When he took her
In his arms.
"To gaze into thine eyes, and
To put a kiss upon thine lips
Would stir the purest bloom."
And in that moment
When stardust falls and
Passion rises
He found himself
In a swoon of love.
(c) Duchess 2012
Oh here's a rare one from me, something short, sweet and romantic.
Between the ages of 6 and 15, I lived in a huge old house that had a small but formal flower garden. I spent a lot of hours playing within the small courtyard, and I always thought that faeries must gather there while I slept. The thought evolved over the years to include a romantic moonlit meeting between a faerie prince and princess.
Between the ages of 6 and 15, I lived in a huge old house that had a small but formal flower garden. I spent a lot of hours playing within the small courtyard, and I always thought that faeries must gather there while I slept. The thought evolved over the years to include a romantic moonlit meeting between a faerie prince and princess.
© 2012 - 2024 DuchessDeNoir
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